I really like the tone you have hear. I thought it worked perfectly for this piece. The way you described Emily's past with her parents really fit her character and made me ache for her. I also liked the way Dave kept popping up when she needed a friend.
The last section was great and I loved that not everything to make her life complete was the marriage and kids, but it also included her career so she really did have it all.
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I really like the tone you have hear. I thought it worked perfectly for this piece. The way you described Emily's past with her parents really fit her character and made me ache for her. I also liked the way Dave kept popping up when she needed a friend.
The last section was great and I loved that not everything to make her life complete was the marriage and kids, but it also included her career so she really did have it all.
Very, very nice. Great job!